I don’t know
when I fell in love with you…
it wasn`t a day
or a week
no set time or phase
I fell in love
in a season
in a summer
in a cool night breeze
in a moment
in the night we breathe
in a thought
in a book somewhere
beneath the trees
in the grass
in the dew
where we placed our hands
and displaced the heat
in a greeting or salutation
a look into your eyes
a smile on your face
and comforting you when you cried
my thoughts were gone
without a trace…
I realized
I was missing you from me
I questioned
if you complete me
soul to my mate
the mate of my soul
lost myself
forgot my goals
you gave a renaissance
to my soul
freed me
from my issue of control
I don’t know when I fell in love
with you
but it wasnt a set day or time
but when I did
I knew you were mine…
Β© Da Absentee 2012
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I have always been a sucker for poems about love. It is one of the most addictive things on this earth. Hands Down…
I don’t have much to say about this post. This one just really came to me.
On another note:
I have concluded that since I have made this blog essentially my diary of sorts; I will begin to post everything I write . This will force me to put more work into drafts which I have sitting and will improve my completion and posting percentages. I usually write then come back to it at a later date.
I have a favor to ask of everyone who follows… Due to a post about “Criticism” on another blog I follow http://gjscobie.wordpress.com/ If anything I post seems like it “needs some work” or it gives you “an idea of something else or another piece” or “you think it would be better if I did this…” Then please let me know. I see myself as an amateur. I am far from a professional. I am not above being taken apart and offered advice to. This WordPress community really gives us an opportunity as artist to come together and make each other better.
So if you anything to share “Please” feel free to do so!
This is the link to the post I was referring :>> http://gjscobie.wordpress.com/2012/06/13/thoughts-on-writing-part-36-criticism/
As Always…
Stay Positive!
I really like this poem… I wish writing about love came easy to me. You certainly captured it well.
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Thanx Muse
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I do love this poem… Beautiful! π
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Thanx. i see you have a dark feel to some of your poetic work. I will try to be a positive addition to your following
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Yes, I guess that does come across quite strongly. Positive is good! Looking forward to sharing with you. π
Soraya
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Soraya. now thats a nice name! You can call me
Ab
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Aww, thanks! Great to meet you, Ab! π
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Nice to meet you too! π
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I love this stanza:
“you gave a renaissance
to my soul
freed me
from my issue of control”
Love does have the power to change us – in many ways.
As I view myself also the amateur, I’m not sure I can be much help with critique. I can offer encouragement and I will let you know (when I’m around) what lines/images/metaphors I find the most appealing and why.
Generally speaking, I’m a sucker for anything emotive and expressive. Love ranks high among my favorite areas of exploration.
Thank you for the link above. I’m off to read.
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K. anything you have to add or share is highly anticipated and appreciated. I consider you a true student to the form of expression.
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Looking forward to reading more of your work! Really liked this one.. I am a sucker for love poems as well.
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Thanx Goblin! To be honest its the first reason I picked up a pen. A little birdie told me girls dig it! hahahaha
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