“When…?”

I don’t know
when I fell in love with you…
it wasn`t a day
or a week

no set time or phase
I fell in love
in a season
in a summer

in a cool night breeze
in a moment
in the night we breathe
in a thought

in a book somewhere
beneath the trees
in the grass
in the dew

where we placed our hands
and displaced the heat
in a greeting or salutation
a look into your eyes

a smile on your face
and comforting you when you cried
my thoughts were gone
without a trace…

I realized
I was missing you from me
I questioned
if you complete me

soul to my mate
the mate of my soul
lost myself
forgot my goals

you gave a renaissance
to my soul
freed me
from my issue of control

I don’t know when I fell in love
with you
but it wasnt a set day or time
but when I did

I knew you were mine…

© Da Absentee 2012

*****

I have always been a sucker for poems about love. It is one of the most addictive things on this earth. Hands Down…

I don’t have much to say about this post. This one just really came to me.

On another note:

I have concluded that since I have made this blog essentially my diary of sorts; I will begin to post everything I write . This will force me to put more work into drafts which I have sitting and will improve my completion and posting percentages. I usually write then come back to it at a later date.

I have a favor to ask of everyone who follows… Due to a post about “Criticism” on another blog I follow http://gjscobie.wordpress.com/ If anything I post seems like it “needs some work” or it gives you “an idea of something else or another piece” or “you think it would be better if I did this…” Then please let me know. I see myself as an amateur. I am far from a professional. I am not above being taken apart and offered advice to. This WordPress community really gives us an opportunity as artist to come together and make each other better.

So if you anything to share “Please” feel free to do so!

This is the link to the post I was referring :>> http://gjscobie.wordpress.com/2012/06/13/thoughts-on-writing-part-36-criticism/

As Always…

Stay Positive!

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12 responses to ““When…?”

  1. I love this stanza:

    “you gave a renaissance
    to my soul
    freed me
    from my issue of control”

    Love does have the power to change us – in many ways.

    As I view myself also the amateur, I’m not sure I can be much help with critique. I can offer encouragement and I will let you know (when I’m around) what lines/images/metaphors I find the most appealing and why.

    Generally speaking, I’m a sucker for anything emotive and expressive. Love ranks high among my favorite areas of exploration.

    Thank you for the link above. I’m off to read.

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