Scribbles – 9

Posted by Da Absentee on

When I push
you pull
that’s how love
turns us into fools

when i`m gone
your here
makes me wish
that I was there

so the love
becomes lost
we grow far apart 
want to let you know
one time ago

you had the keys to my heart…

– Da Absentee –

4 responses to “Scribbles – 9”

  2. there’s something really profound in this one that hits home… i can’t believe u put all this into 3 stanzas. but it shows how even when someone ‘holds the key to your heart’ things like different schedules, long distance, or even small arguments can break those. But you know what i like about how you ended this, you just were honest & not bitter. you put it how it was, & let the reality itself convey bitterness, while you (the writer) maintained an almost blunt matter of fact tone about such a sensitive emotional matter, it had a really lovable effect. that made it way cooler than if it had a dramatic or whiny toned. i love this

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